Antigone Cadmus

Agreed, though I still don't understand why you drug Final Fantasy into this...

Hippocampus can be a Greek horse thingy, too. At least I think! Ha, it's shiny! Yay! Did you do all that with gel pens? The best doodles stem from boredom.

Short black hair- cut scene kid style, with bangs across face average height, not too skinny, not too fat. Pale Piercings

Banned because, how would you know? I'm in your mind, you aren't in mine.

Hey! I promise I'll do a full review later, but here is some critique right away. 1. Again with the dialogue! Absolutely no description. I don't mean you need to ...

Banned because you are. Don't ask questions.

No. Sadly, I've never been to Europe. Only Asia. TPBM lives in London!

Hmmm... you just gave yourself away *points to above post*

It sounds like fantasy to me. I would say action is more like a war novel, thriller or James Bond thingy.

Most fantasy tends to have action and romance, so I would post it there. But it's your call. What element do you think you incorporate the most?

Banned because it doesn't take the spelling police to point out the mispelling of "wasting".

Nice. Good descriptions. Paragraph 3: You used 'threw' instead of "through" Paragraph 4: 'one's' should be 'ones'. You aren't showing possesion here. Also, is this modern time or ancient? I ...

Ooh, wow. An actual good poet! I especially love the use of the word facade. It's totally on my list of fun words. It's meaningful and very true. Good analogies. ...

This is an intimidating amount to critique... I started reading, but I got bored, sorry. But I am impressed. You did your research. You're pretty knowledgeable about Japanese culture. Props ...

Banned because whenever I see your posts, I picture you as looking like Natalie Portman...